高分！修改一篇100字的英语小短文

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本人快要上学了，没什么时间上网了，这是一篇很短的，准备打在博客上，可是，我不知道语法有没有错误，恳请高手给我指出。然后，我个人觉得，用first ,seconed..等连接词不太好，能不能把我写的尽量连接通顺一点，美观一点。短文大意是说我上学了，很少上网，不闲聊。。 大家尽量在今天之内。谢谢！好的话，我再追加分，嘻嘻，我还有很多分。。都可以奉献一下。
文章内容如下：
First,I'm going to study.and I seldom surf the Internet.
Seconed,I'm happy to know everyone,and I find fun in chatting.
Third,I just have a half of day freedom every studyweek,and i won't have more time on QQ
Forth,I really hope to improve my study,get better than ever before,and cheer up everyone who i know~
Fifth,Sometimes,i think i will on QQ,please don't call me to disturb.
at last ~Please remember there was a girl let you have a good time ever ,With you during the boring time.and what's more,let us keep intouch,OK?see u~
快慢也没有关系，关键是质量，。。

补充1！ 这不是自信不自信的事～有很多我都不太懂～
补充2 让大家失望了，我也是高一的。。我也知道first,seconed~~这些不太好～这只是我的草稿而已，作文提纲而已，为了方便我写，就列成一啊，二啊，三啊，四啊，这样子……
补充3 后来，发现自己没什么兴趣，写不下去了 就是这样，所以才放上百度来帮忙

整篇帮你修改润色了！给我分吧！ 英语专业的，相信我啦
这是对朋友们说的，应该更生活化，first ,seconed..等连接词太生硬了像写议论文。
My dear friends:
I'm going to school, so I will seldom surf on the Internet.
I want to tell you that, I'm very happy to know everyone, and I have fun in chatting.
In the following term, I just have half a day of freedom on every study-week, and I won't have more time on QQ.
Most importantly, I really hope to improve my study get better than ever before. In addiction, I’d like to cheer up everyone who I know~
Although, I think I will on QQ sometimes because of study，please don't call me by QQ, otherwise you will disturb me.
At last ~Please remember there was a girl let you had a good time ever, and stayed with you during the boring time.
What's more, let us keep in touch,OK? See u~

Yours. O_O芭芘girl

I'm happy to know everyone,and I find fun in chatting.
But