UC知道请大家帮我看看，我翻译的正确吗？
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我是个36岁的女性，由于小时候得过脑瘤，导致上学跟不上，我只上到小学就辍学了，从此一直在家。但我通过自己的努力参加了北京市英语口语等级考试（中级），计算机等级考试（一级）。我现在听取别人的建议刚开始学英语翻译，以下是我刚刚翻译的一段英文，不知对否？有哪些错，还请大家多多指点，谢谢了！
原文
One day,Xiao Ming was walking his dog in the park.He found a 10-yuan note on the grass.He wanted to get it.Just before he stepped on the grass, he saw a notice reading:"Keep off the grass!Disobey penal sum 10 yuan."
He stealthily（偷偷地）stepped on the grass and picked up the money.Just as he was walking away, a guard stopped him.As a result, he gave back the money and was fined（罚款）for stepped on the grass.
译文
一天，小明正在公园里遛狗，他发现草坪里有十元钱，他想得到它，就在他踏入草坪之前，他发现了一张告示：远离草坪，违背者罚款10元！他偷偷地踏入草坪把钱捡了起来，他刚要走，一个警察拦住了他，结果他退还了钱并且还因为踏入草坪被罚了款。
原文
One day,Xiao Ming was walking his dog in the park.He found a 10-yuan note on the grass.He wanted to get it.Just before he stepped on the grass, he saw a notice reading:"Keep off the grass!Disobey penal sum 10 yuan."
He stealthily（偷偷地）stepped on the grass and picked up the money.Just as he was walking away, a guard stopped him.As a result, he gave back the money and was fined（罚款）for stepped on the grass.
译文
一天，小明正在公园里遛狗，他发现草坪里有十元钱，他想得到它，就在他踏入草坪之前，他发现了一张告示：远离草坪，违背者罚款10元！他偷偷地踏入草坪把钱捡了起来，他刚要走，一个警察拦住了他，结果他退还了钱并且还因为踏入草坪被罚了款。
嗯！……不错！
One day, Xiao Ming遛狗is the park, he found that there are ten-dollar lawn money, he wanted it, on the lawn before he entered, he found a notice: stay away from the lawn, contrary to a fine of 10 yuan from! He secretly into the lawn to pick up the money, he just leave, a policeman stopped him and he returned the money and also because the penalty has been made into the lawn.
只有个别单词 告示和违背者 感觉怪怪的耶
太好了