UC知道谁能帮我改下英语雅思作文啊
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下面这个是大作文（最少250），有啥不合规范的或者写错的帮忙在文章后面后面改写一下。题目是运动员的收入比其他领域的专家收入多是否合理。
What person may attract the more attention than others? And what person may be the most dazzling among the stars? The answer is sports professionals which can earn a great deal money as export in other important professions can not reach so much.
As you know, the scientists have much profession knowledge, and they work hard to make a great many of contributions for our world. The Chinese man, named Longpin Yuan, innovated a type of wheat which performed excellent in facing food scarcity by produce many more corns. Do not you think he should earn a great deal more money than the sports professionals? The fact that scientists are not treated highly as the sports athletes as they are so significant lead some people consider that it is unfair.
When traced back to our youngest childhood, I had a dream I would be a famous scientist with many innovations as many children dream to. We do consider that science ar
What person may attract the more attention than others? And what person may be the most dazzling among the stars? The answer is sports professionals which can earn a great deal money as export in other important professions can not reach so much.
As you know, the scientists have much profession knowledge, and they work hard to make a great many of contributions for our world. The Chinese man, named Longpin Yuan, innovated a type of wheat which performed excellent in facing food scarcity by produce many more corns. Do not you think he should earn a great deal more money than the sports professionals? The fact that scientists are not treated highly as the sports athletes as they are so significant lead some people consider that it is unfair.
When traced back to our youngest childhood, I had a dream I would be a famous scientist with many innovations as many children dream to. We do consider that science ar
第一篇大作文漏洞比较多。中式英语太多，表达的意思非常含糊。
虽然我不是考官，但是就我来看，这样的文章可能达不到5分的要求。
词汇比较单一，作者对长句的把握还有待考量。
你的第一句话就让人比较失望。As you know这类的词句出现在议论文里是大忌。
词性的把握也不是很到位。还望继续练习。
这只是个人观点，若有失水准，还望见谅。