英文老师帮忙看看我的翻译对不对!!

英文是错的
it would better not missing two things in the life.
The last bus to go home and a person who deeply love me.

不对

人生最好不要错过两样东西：
回家的末班车和深爱自己的爱人！

对，我确信。

你那句挺多语法错误，英译中不能直译
One has better not miss this two things in the life,the last bus to go back home and an affectionate person to oneself.

there are two things we should not miss in life
the last bus taking you home and the one who love you the most