谁来帮我看一下这篇英语短文有没有语病？？？

来源：百度知道 编辑：UC知道 时间：2024/06/23 08:22:41
A new year is coming again .I am very happy because I will be one year elder ,14 years old .An unknown world is waiting for me ,there will be successes and failures ,however ,i really look forward to the adventure of the new year.

我很着急的！！！~！~！~！

one year older不是elder
i really look forward改成i'm really looking forward
adventures
of the new year中of改成in

确实读着感觉很怪。你肯定是先用中文想，然后再翻成英文的。

A new year is coming again .I am very happy because I will be one year elder ,14 years old .An unknown world is waiting for me ,there will be successes and failures ,however ,I really look forward to the adventures of the new year.

elder改为older
there前加and
此外，感觉表达上不太符合英文的表达习惯，像是对汉语的逐词翻译