UC知道帮忙修改下，主要是语法的错误，最好能解释下错因！谢谢
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" My wife can see everything that I do in the sky" he said," I am 51 years old,47 years old of the wife who die, we are all from the Connecticut state of taught in a high school.In 1996,I steped on the Chinese land with Ornan for the first time,she is very quick was drawn on with simple people and beautiful scenery.The Children though has no money, the pencil does not good to use, they under the moonlight study, having a class in the house that leak air, very great.After retiring, we arrive at China, but, in 2002, Ornan is looked up the cancer in Shanghai, we return to the Connecticut state treatment.But, because the cancer cell spread, the Ornan took to love dearly to leave me with the regret, she spoken her wish —— For China poor and love
An American who years over half hundred, in order to completed wife's wish, in the last years he walked to cross the Chinese land, each to a city, will taken out 500 yuan enter the native Red Cross contribute money boxes……
首先说，这个长句中，一开始你用的是who 引导的定语从句，但是从句部分有些问题。An American who is over half of hundred years,应该是这样的！
下面半句，to 后面应该接动词原形即：in order to complete wife's wish
然后是"walked to cross"这个句子也稍有问题，我没在英语中常用"walk across"然后是will 后面也应该用动词原形构成一般将来时，然后will 前缺了个主语he．in the past years 也算是固定词组，“在过去的几年里”，句子大概是这样的：in the past years he walked across the Chinese land, each city,he will take out 500 yuan for the native Red Cross to contribute money boxes……
" My wife can see everything that I do in the sky" he said," I am 51 years old,47 years old of the wife who die, we are all from the Connecticut state of taught in a high school.In 1996,I steped on the Chinese land with Ornan for the first time,she is very quick was drawn on