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In recent years, there are a sharply increased number of people who would like keeping pets such as dogs, cats and birds. But some people believe that pets can make a lot of noises to neighbors especially to the old people, who may not sleep well by noises come from the dogs or birds lived near to his apartment. They also argue that some diseases could be widely spread through keeping pets to the human.
In spite of those arguments, most of people who think that there is no evidence to show that pets must be responsible for those bad things such as diseases or noises. They point out that keeping pets can reduce loneliness to adults and children. They emphasize that dogs are the best friends of people in today’s indifferent society. What’s more, keeping pets might lead to a warmly atmosphere of our living communities.
In my opinion, I inclined to agree with later point of view. It is self-evident that the advantages of keeping pets are over
先说几个非常chinglish的地方：
L4' who may not...英文里很少有who may not出现：L4'（ pets can make a lot of noises to neighbors especially to the old people） + leaving them outrageously disturbed from sound sleep and good rest.你不用再提是鸟叫影响的还是狗叫影响的（原文noises come from the dogs or birds lived near to his apartment.），阅卷人会认为你是鄙视他智商或在凑字数。
（They also argue that some diseases could be widely spread through keeping pets to the human）：没有keep pets to human的说法，如果直接说：disease spreads from pets to human who keep them ,或者更简单spread from pets to their owners.不是就解决问题了吗
第二段（that pets must be responsible for those bad things such as diseases or noises）你让pets怎么responsible呢？-->pets are not to blame for the noise and disease.
然后是语法错误：最后一段（I inclined to）-->I'm inclined to agree with
(with later point of view)-->with the latter
(are overweight the disadvantages )-->去掉are，用动词形式
思路很规范，但是论证本身略自相矛盾，先说宠物的叫声发出噪音，又说没有证据证明噪音是宠物发出的，那么是谁发出的，有人在学鸟叫和狗叫吗？反驳一个观点