可以帮我修改我的英语自我介绍吗？

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我是初三的学生，要口语插标考试了
写了一篇自我介绍
可不可以帮我修改一下
谢谢了

Hello,Here's Violate's introduction time.Yeah, Violate is my English
name, and my name is ***.I'm 15 now and study in junior 3. Like you know ,teenagers always like ice-cream and swimming.So do i. Though have lots of schoolwork, i still keep at least one thing to relax.
I love to listen to music that is song by BoA. It's really amazing and gave me a strong power. So I'm willing to enjoy her bright voice and also bright to my friends.
That's me, a real me.Thank you for listening.

Hello,Here's Violate's introduction time.Yeah, Violate is my English
name, and my name is ***.I'm 15 now and study in junior 3. As you know ,teenagers always like ice-cream and swimming.So do i. Though there is lots of schoolwork, i still keep a habit of relaxing myself for doing at least one thing.
I love listening BoA's music which can give me a strong power,it's really amazing. So I'm willing to enjoy her bright voice and also bright to my friends. (后半句没看懂)
That's me, a real me.Thank you for your time!

I'm 15 now and I'm studying in junior 3.

Hello.It's time to introduce myself.My name is ***,my English name in Violate.I'm 15 now and I'm studying in junior 3.Like you know,teenagers always like ice-cream and swimming.So do I.Though there are lots of homework everyday,I still keep one thing to relax at least.I love listening to the music about BOA,it's really amazing and give me a strong power.So my fr