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Hallo , my name is David , I’m a 16-year-old boy ,I was born in September the thirtieth ,nineteen ninety . I always speak Chinese at school and at home , but I have second language , this is English . At school ,I have many subjects, like math , science , Chinese, art, PE and so on .There’s kindergarten, primary , junior, high school and university in china .Time flies ,I’ve finish my junior education . I enjoyed playing PC games and listening to music before ,but now, I like to walk alone in the park .
I’ve been to many places in china . for example , HK , Peking , Hangzhou , Nanjing and so on .HK is a busy city , everyone here every minute doing their works , they even haven’t free time ! but in Hangzhou , there’s no too much work to do , everyone feels relaxed , and this is a beautiful city , I want to go to the beauty west lake again . the second largest city is Peking , there , you can visit the Palace Museum or the Great Wall , that’s wonderful !
Now , let me tell you

1.September the thirtieth 去掉the，读的时候要用，写就不用写。
2.but I have second language , this is English 改成but I have a second language,that is English.
3.There’s改成There're
4.I like to walk改成I like walking
5. everyone here every minute doing their works 改成everyone there has to do their work all the time比较通一点
6.haven’t 改成don't have
7.there’s no 改成there isn't
8.this is a beautiful city 改成that is a beautiful city
9.diner是这样拼的dinner
10. where am I ?这样说是中国式的英语，应该说What am I doing ?
11.many more money 改成much more money,因为money是不可数的
12.It’s only my dream 这句话不通，但是怎么改都不好

1."china"change into"China",(china means a kind of material,but when you want to express the meaning of a country, you must use the capital letter-that's actually a grammar problem);
2."finish" into"finished"(tense problem)
3.When you say"like to do" ,you probably means at a certain occasio